Getting ready for the Alumni Retreat: The Pitch

Welcome back!

Well the Alumni retreat is fast approaching and I’m looking forward to meeting with all my friends and faculty at Seton Hill. But even more important, I’ll have an opportunity to pitch my novel to some of the agents who will be at the retreat. There’s one problem.

I’ve never done a pitch in person.

Now, I’ve spoken about my book to many people, and also have written a query letter about it, but this will be the first time I go to a conference and pitch this thing in front of an agent. I’m very nervous about this and I’ve read quite a bit about making the perfect elevator pitch, but I’m still not sure if I’ve got a good one.

I’d like to throw out my pitch here and would appreciate any feedback on it. Does it work? What needs to be tweaked? Any suggestions are welcome. Here it is:

What if you forgot you lived a different life? And what if someone is trying to kill you because of it? In this science-fantasy, Maria, an amnesic combat cyborg turned farmer’s wife, has to find out more of who she was before she’s hunted down. What she finds out leads to a revelation which will end everything she knows and loves.